Wednesday, January 26, 2011

A Good Role Model?

The newly crowned Miss America is 17. Teresa Scanlan former Miss Nebraska is “Mature Beyond Her Age” stated by her father. In a media controlled world were girls look up to the good gone bad Miley Cyrus and Demi Lovato who is being rehabilitated for "emotional and physical issues" according to her camp. Will the crowning of a 17 year old Miss America give young and teen girls someone to look up to or will the bad girls of media out shine her rhinestone crown?

1 comment:

Andy Duncan said...

Grace, making your link a label is probably not a good idea. Could you move the link to the body of your post, please?

More importantly, one of your sentences is not a sentence, but a fragment.

Also, you include no commas, although commas are vital in helping your reader decipher what you mean.

You've also misspelled a word -- or, more precisely, spelled a different word from the one you intended.

Could you fix these, please?